KNIFE, Fit the Third

[rj_anderson]

Well, I've just finished rewriting the Prologue of my original fantasy novel, most of it from scratch, using the previous draft as little more than an outline (and changing any number of details along the way). I've taken a lot of information that was infodump before, and worked it into the dialogue and narrative instead; I've changed the dynamics between the characters and beefed up the atmosphere and mood; and I've cut out a couple of scenes that were either unnecessary or belonged elsewhere in the book. I don't know how many of you recall reading the original version a couple of years back, but here's how the new draft's shaping up:

KNIFE - Prologue

I'm having way too much fun with this all of a sudden. Somebody stop me before I rewrite the entire novel!*

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*Just kidding. I won't really do that. At least, I don't think...

ETA 06/27: First two paragraphs revised to cut down on the wordiness noted by, well, just about everybody.

Comments

[kerravonsen]

Oooh!

The second paragraph was a bit info-dumpy and hard to follow (switching back and forth between the descriptions of the two women made it hard to build up the picture) but once past that... ah, this looks interesting.

[rj-anderson.livejournal.com]

Yes, I'll have to find some better way to phrase those descriptions to eliminate the back-and-forthing. I think it's primarily those two sentences that give the impression of wordiness.

I'm glad to hear it caught your interest, though!

[kerravonsen]

I like things that do interesting twists to conventional fairy-tales -- and having fairies living in fear inside an oak, with some great Fall in their collective past, well, that's a twist on the usual light-and-fluffy fairies-at-the-bottom-of-the-garden thing.