Coming from fanfic, the first thing I notice is your impeccable English. If I see one more person 'illicit' a reaction I may throw my computer across the room. I actively like your OCs as people, and, the highest praise of all for a fanfic author, (although it works better for TV fanfic than books like Harry Potter) I can actually hear the characters saying the lines in my head. WHen reading your writing I never get the urge to break out a red pen.