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rj_anderson) wrote2007-04-17 06:48 pm
rj_anderson) wrote2007-04-17 06:48 pm
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*facedesk*
I've just seen the first batch of hook critiques on ![[livejournal.com profile]](https://www.dreamwidth.org/img/external/lj-community.gif)
fangs_fur_fey, and come to the realization that my hook for Indigo (which hasn't been judged yet) is terrible. It's flat, passive, and gives no indication whatsoever of the characters's personalities or my voice as a writer. About the only thing going for it is that it's short -- which may be a plus when you've got one agent reading hundreds of hooks a week, but when you're competing for the attention of a judge with only 10-20 hooks to review, not so much.
On the plus side, I suppose this means I don't have to worry about polishing up my first five pages.
*sigh*
On a more positive note, I do want to say how much I appreciate all of you who've contributed your thoughts, advice, and words of encouragement in response to my Writing Angst. I apologize for being such a downer -- thanks for bearing with me.
P.S. In case anybody wonders what I'm on about, this is the hook I sent in:
Sentenced to an asylum after confessing to her schoolmate's bizarre murder, Alison Jeffries fights to prove her sanity, even if she cannot prove her innocence. But when her acute sensitivity to colors and sounds causes her to lash out at a nurse, her reputation as a model patient is destroyed. Then Dr. Faraday, the neurologist who has taken a special interest in her case, is exposed as an impostor and barred from the hospital. Unable to accept his seeming betrayal, Alison escapes the asylum and follows Faraday to the scene of her supposed crime, only to trigger a device that transports them both to his home a thousand light-years away. There Alison finds the truth about what happened to her schoolmate and a chance to clear her name -- but first she must elude a team of alien scientists, confront her greatest fear, and learn to embrace her unusual sensory gifts before she can return to Earth and reclaim her future.
fangs_fur_fey, and come to the realization that my hook for Indigo (which hasn't been judged yet) is terrible. It's flat, passive, and gives no indication whatsoever of the characters's personalities or my voice as a writer. About the only thing going for it is that it's short -- which may be a plus when you've got one agent reading hundreds of hooks a week, but when you're competing for the attention of a judge with only 10-20 hooks to review, not so much.On the plus side, I suppose this means I don't have to worry about polishing up my first five pages.
*sigh*
On a more positive note, I do want to say how much I appreciate all of you who've contributed your thoughts, advice, and words of encouragement in response to my Writing Angst. I apologize for being such a downer -- thanks for bearing with me.
P.S. In case anybody wonders what I'm on about, this is the hook I sent in:
Sentenced to an asylum after confessing to her schoolmate's bizarre murder, Alison Jeffries fights to prove her sanity, even if she cannot prove her innocence. But when her acute sensitivity to colors and sounds causes her to lash out at a nurse, her reputation as a model patient is destroyed. Then Dr. Faraday, the neurologist who has taken a special interest in her case, is exposed as an impostor and barred from the hospital. Unable to accept his seeming betrayal, Alison escapes the asylum and follows Faraday to the scene of her supposed crime, only to trigger a device that transports them both to his home a thousand light-years away. There Alison finds the truth about what happened to her schoolmate and a chance to clear her name -- but first she must elude a team of alien scientists, confront her greatest fear, and learn to embrace her unusual sensory gifts before she can return to Earth and reclaim her future.
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