KNIFE, Fit the Third

[rj_anderson]

Well, I've just finished rewriting the Prologue of my original fantasy novel, most of it from scratch, using the previous draft as little more than an outline (and changing any number of details along the way). I've taken a lot of information that was infodump before, and worked it into the dialogue and narrative instead; I've changed the dynamics between the characters and beefed up the atmosphere and mood; and I've cut out a couple of scenes that were either unnecessary or belonged elsewhere in the book. I don't know how many of you recall reading the original version a couple of years back, but here's how the new draft's shaping up:

KNIFE - Prologue

I'm having way too much fun with this all of a sudden. Somebody stop me before I rewrite the entire novel!*

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*Just kidding. I won't really do that. At least, I don't think...

ETA 06/27: First two paragraphs revised to cut down on the wordiness noted by, well, just about everybody.

Comments

[infiniteviking]

Ooh. OOOOH. This is the first I've seen of Knife, and I'm impressed. I love your settings and descriptions, and there are so many plot hooks... Thorn's defensive harshness, Bryony's strange legacy, the distantly ominous House, the madness whose very whisper terrifies Wink... my only criticism is that the characters have so much to say on the stairs that it's a bit hard to keep up. But that might be only me.

May the rest of the revisions go as well!